False Pride-continued

by Lakshmi Menon
(Bangalore)

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Tears of repentance rolled down Shalini’s cheeks and she breathed heavily so loudly that he could hear, but he did not respond. He succeeded in suppressing the anger and despair that welled up in his mind and slept off.

The next day dawned and both of them wished sincerely a change in each other’s attitude. Because of their false pride the day had to pass mechanically again.

The long awaited holiday came the following day. Shalini found the life to be miserable and extremely difficult to pull on any more like strangers. After all I am the wife. What is wrong in me if I go and apologise to my husband this time? Her guilty conscious pricked her mind.

She brought a steaming cup of coffee to Dinesh with her usual broad smile and a fast beating heart; in return she found a ray of victorious smile on his face, but she didn’t feel hurt and she told herself every time she need not be a winner. Slowly, his hands moved towards her. “Shalu…. My darling,” he whispered passionately. The moment she heard the very words she longed to hear for all this time, Shalini forgot her enemity towards her husband, and clung to him like a child. Immediately, Dinesh wiped away her tears, and held her tightly in his arms and showered her with hot kisses. He felt an unwelcome pang of guilt for hurting his poor wife.

“I’m ………sorry, Dinesh. I’ll not .....quarrel with you.... any more,” Shalini whispered in between sobs.

“So as I”, holding her more tightly Dinesh whispered into her ears. Shalini realized again how meaningful the life is!

The lonely lizard on the roof, witnessing the fun, made a noise approving their promise and closed its eyes shyly.

The End

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Nov 19, 2012
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really ,this is my story
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Oct 12, 2012
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Thanks
by: Lakshmi

Thanks Pushpa for your encouraging comments.

Sep 25, 2012
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False Pride
by: Pushpa Raghuram

A lesson all young couples must learn.
Very interestingly written.

Feb 12, 2012
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Good...........
by: Amavasya

Nice written plot and I appreciate the way you maintained the curiosity of the reader till the end of the story.Every day life is there and this story is quite natural and down to earth.

Jan 17, 2012
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Everyone's story
by: Tanuja

Hi! Very nicely portrayed.

Jan 17, 2012
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Thanks Soumyashree
by: Lakshmi

Thank you Soumyashree for your visit and commenting the story. I feel that you have totally understood my idea of writing down this story, which indeed makes me feel very happy and wanting to write more. If such small issues are not sorted out immediately or totally ignored these ego problems can create havoc in a marriage.

Jan 17, 2012
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Thanks Pallavi
by: Lakshmi

Thank you very much Pallavi for reading the story and leaving your valuable comments.
I'm glad to know that you liked it and can connect it with the lives of today's couple.

Jan 17, 2012
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Nice and valuable story
by: Soumyashree.A

The story is basically the mixture of love and ego's between couple.
This is how the understanding between couple improvises and would lead to better life and future.Totally the story is awesome and the values of love and life are nicely focused. I personally liked the main core of the story and values behind that.

Jan 11, 2012
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lovely story
by: Pallavi

Very Nice story.I can connect it with the lives of today's couple.The thing called "EGO" is very much into all of us.Accept it to ruin your life or neglect it to make your life much more happier..Its all up to us...

Jan 09, 2012
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Thanks Geeta
by: Lakshmi

Thanks Geeta for reading the story and commenting. I've seen several young couple with this type of ego problem.

Jan 07, 2012
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Dear Lakshmi
by: Geetashree Chatterjee

A charming narration. Yes, we should be careful not to let egos clash and encroach into any relationship.

Jan 05, 2012
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Thanks to all
by: Lakshmi

Sneha, thanks a lot for your encouraging comments.

Vimala, glad to know that you liked the story. We can see such ego problems in many young couples.

Lakshmi Bhat, I agree such a saying is there in other languages too. If they don't compromise soon it can lead into major problems.

Bala, you are very true. We can often see such silly fights in young married couple. In fact it is partially based on a known couple's story and was written long ago.

Isabel, thanks for your interesting comments. I too have heard such things like if a lizard makes a sound during a conversation it will come true.
i don't know whether it is true or not.

Jan 05, 2012
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a perfect...
by: isabel

Only great writers can make a beautiful and perfect ending... To evoke mixed emotion is such an immense talent as well.

It made me cry and smile at the same time... I so love the ending Lakshmi especially when you added that lonely lizard on the roof! :)

(In Asian countries if a lizard made a clicking sound, it's considered good luck. More good luck and fortune will come if it drops something on your head by accident!)

Jan 05, 2012
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Fights & reconciliations - nice little story
by: Bala

Life is a passage of changing tastes and experiences between relations and friends. A newly married couple often fight for no reason since it takes time for them to understand each other and adjust. With such fights comes maturity in due course. A nice little story.

Jan 05, 2012
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False Pride
by: Eva Bell

Marital Conflict and ego hassles!
"Let not the sun go down on your wrath," is a good way to forgive and forget.

Jan 05, 2012
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Nice story
by: Lakshmi M Bhat

I remembered this saying which we have in Kannada, maybe it is in every language, ' the quarrel of husband and wife should not be passed over to the next day'.
Thanks for a nice story.
Lakshmi

Jan 04, 2012
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EGOS
by: vimala ramu

Yes, it is the 'ego's that stand in the way of a healthy,mature relationship. A sweet story,Lakshmi.

Jan 03, 2012
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False Pride
by: Sneha

I'm sure all the couples out there would profoundly agree with your story. Its about loving and letting go of egos subsequently! Else it ruins relationships.

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