Well, first of all thank you for all your comments. Well, about anthropomorphism, I did not deliberately use that technique in this story. If you read minutely, this short story is set within the time frame of some hours. A last thing would be - - I really do not think that succumbing a little to your emotions sometimes makes you less strong. We all go through such moments in life, and then take it in our stride.
Thank you for your feedback. Hope some of your thoughts are better explained now.
Mar 10, 2010 Rating
nice by: Anonymous
I found this story to be touching and yet not very original. I totally understand that it's really hard to place yourself in a much older person's shoes and write from their perspective, but I thought that the story fell short in that respect. I wish there was a little more anthrophomorphism in it and I truly, truly wish you would start creating strong female characters who keep their memories alive but are not imprisoned in them.
Mar 07, 2010 Rating
Thank you by: Anonymous
Thanks Ankita, for your encouraging comment !
Feb 23, 2010 Rating
Superb! by: Ankita Shende
Superb! i liked d way u narrated..sum good thoughts n' good story..liked d way it was unfolded..
Feb 23, 2010 Rating
Thank you by: Anonymous
I'm glad that my story had such an impact on you. Surely, shower your grandmother with lots of love and listening. These are the only two things required sometimes!
Feb 21, 2010 Rating
good writing! by: Priscilla
good writing :) after reading this, i really want to be more sensitive to my widowed grandma.. esp. her emotional needs, not just her physical ones.
Feb 21, 2010 Rating
Thank you by: Anonymous
Thank you for reading and for your wishes, Ashwini.
Feb 20, 2010 Rating
Good narrative! by: Ashwini Muley
You have a good narrative style. Also good observation of life itself! All the best for future writing...
Feb 20, 2010 Rating
Thank you by: Sneha
Thank you for your comments to all of you. Would like to add that this is the story which is set up in one day of life of the woman portrayed here. She's gone through some sensitive moments in life and this story captures those.
Thank you for your encouraging comments Eva and Amitava!
Feb 19, 2010 Rating
touching by: Amitava Nag
... good...liked it... short and beautiful
Feb 19, 2010 Rating
Gone Away by: Eva Bell
Gone Away:
Memories are sometimes so haunting, and old age is not the golden age people pretend it is.
Nice and crisp.
Feb 19, 2010 Rating
Comment on Short Story by: Raja
Last Paragraph and the 3rd para from last made me feel like ......., You know better.
Please write some stories with +ve energy, which will make the readers happy and vibrant.
raja
Feb 19, 2010 Rating
Superb writeup by: Raghu
Though its tragic, its very well written, in the sense the reader will be immersed in the story. Why not try some "life is good" kinda story, as in life is all about being happy ?
