Mother Tree- continued...

by Nuggehalli Pankaja
(Bangalore, India)

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Vasant was apprehensive his mother might create a scene; The children had also gathered around, to watch the fun. But Sushilabayi remained strangely silent, gazing-watching……….. Each blow of the axe brought forth a swift onrush of memories, and each crack a sort of rigidity in her form. She felt the tree reaching out to her, begging her help……….” I am also helpless”- She whispered silently-“An unwanted old forming my own house…….”

At last the task was done; With a heavy sigh and rustle of leaves, the huge tree began to totter.

“There was quite a family up there”-Remarked Sushilabai suddenly-“Alas, now they will have no home………”

The birds soared up, as though to bid goodbye-a heavy thud, the mighty tree fell down. Wiping their faces, the men sat down.

The anxious lines on Vasant’s face relaxed. Thank God the giant task was over; He turned towards his mother.

“Time for lunch-come in amma."

There was no reply-he gave a start.
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Sushilabayi's body was cold as ice!!


The End


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Apr 11, 2013
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by: nuggehallipankaja

Dear Anonymous
Thanks for your very encouraging comment. it is so inspiring, I am eager to know your name. May I hope you will disclose it shortly?

Apr 10, 2013
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Mother Tree
by: Anonymous

Very inspiring and touching.Loved the way you spun the story around the tree. I've read your other stories too. As an avid reader, I'm really inspired by your narrative styles. Keep writing.
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Sep 29, 2012
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Mother tree.
by: Pushpa Raghuram

Generation gap is very sensitively highlighted.

Sep 28, 2012
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by: Anuggehallipankaja

Very nicely- worded comment Pushpa. Do I Kow you?If not,may I know you?

Sep 27, 2012
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Mother Tree
by: Pushpa Raghuram

A touching short story, reflecting the sentiments of the older generation and the practical way of thinking of younger generation.


Sep 26, 2012
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by: nuggehallipankaja

Anita,
Poetically phrased sentences! With such an expressive language at your disposal,and experiences of travelling,you can also take up short-story writing! Do try.

Sep 26, 2012
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Mother Tree
by: Anita R. Belagodu

The old tradition, values, sentiments give way to new. Its hard to swallow and hurts to give in to new ways when u have relished,digested the best of yesteryear moments and the same does not hold good anymore. It is hard to swallow the bitterness of truth in the present against the sweet past.The mantra is to let go.Easier said than done. Love the feelings, emotions captured in your story madam. Realistic and true. Through generations, from childhood- teenage-youth, middle age adulthood and old age mind ergonomics will defy and deny acceptance.Knowing is bliss, not knowing, ignorance.

Sep 18, 2012
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by: nuggehallipankaja

Eva,
I know you through your stories which are highly interesting. Naturally I am glad to make your
acquaintance through this wonderful medium.Happy by your assessment of of my story.

Sep 17, 2012
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Mother Tree
by: Eva Bell

Touching Story!
The Generation Gap can often be traumatic.

Sep 16, 2012
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Kumuda,
Getting such a beautiful letter couched in such excellent language typical of your standing a a versatile established writer overwhelms me! The thoughts expressed by you conveys a new dimension to the story written in an inspired mood.

Sep 14, 2012
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an excellent story
by: Kumuda Purushotham

Pankaja a poet at heart has strayed in to another genre but the thread of poetry runs right through. A beautiful and poingnant tale of a tree that not only symbolises the green cfover but alsothe hopes, belief, aspirations and values of older generation. It shows the futility of standing up to old values in a changing world. It is a tragedy faced by every successive generation.
A tale excellently told .

Sep 04, 2012
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by: nuggehallipankaja

Shridar,
You know in what esteem I hold you. as such, the wonderful -sincere compliments showered on me has made my day. How about you also contributing to this site?If you go through all its journals,you will be impressed. Lakshmi Menon is really doing creditable work by providing this site for promising -aspiring writers old and new.

Sep 04, 2012
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Very touching
by: Varalotti Rengasamy

You've done it Pankaja. Very touching. Though the end was expected the words had the power to hold our attention. When are we going to see people who look upon a tree as a living being! When we see tree as fuel and cash, a blemish and a nuisance, it only means that our days in this planet are numbered.
Hats off to you, Pankaja.
- sridhar

Sep 04, 2012
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by: nuggehallipankaja

Chitvish and Isabella,

Thank you very much for the nice compliments
I am sure it will prove as an inspiration for my future works.

Sep 04, 2012
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I was...
by: Isabel

I was transfixed...You have a brilliant way of telling stories, made the reader read on and on until the last punctuation.

Looking forward on reading more of your future contribution here at iww.

Sep 04, 2012
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the old order......
by: chitvish

Changeth, yielding place new, choicelessly. The word "sensitive" to how others feel, even to one,s own mother, has no relevance in today's world:-( Though hard to digest, this is the harsh, sad reality which has become the order of the day, sadly. Pankaja, your style is so gentle, almost mesmerising!
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Sep 03, 2012
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Analysed correctly
by: Nuggehalli Pankaja

Thanks.
Vimala,you have analysed correctly-'Generation gap'

Sep 02, 2012
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The story
by: vimala ramu

An excellent story. The generation gap is very well brought out in the story of the tree.

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