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Naked - contd

by Deepali Sagar
(Delhi, India)

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We were having dinner. Actually he was having dinner and I was still trying to calm my inner self. “”Sanaya, I really want to ask you something. Why the hell you purr like a kitten and are literally blushing when I’m close to you, considering the fact that…”
He stopped in the middle. I knew what he wanted to say but probably he didn’t know how to say it in a mellowed down tone. So, I decided to ease it for him.

‘I still get goosebumps when I see you,
My heart still skips a beat whenever you’re near,
I still get excited whenever you tell me that we’re meeting,
Even though I’ve never told you that I love you, still my body resonates it every time and every second of the day…’

He looked at me speechless and I continued, “That’s the reason why I purr like a kitten and blush uncontrollably when you’re with me. I’ve been naked many times in front of whole audience… but none of them have been able to see through me like you’ve. That’s why even right now with full clothes on, I feel Naked in front of you.”
He remained quiet for sometime and ate his dinner in silence. Disappointment flooded me and even though I didn’t want to, I ended up asking, “Don’t you’ve anything to say?”
He looked at me and smiled…

‘She asked what shape does he give his thoughts,
The rounded lump down his throat they bring,
Come close, he said.
He bears no weight of emotions, she said,
The crushed spine of his disappointed head hung low, said otherwise.
She demands reflection from a well gone dry.
She anticipates responsibility from a man drowning in penance.
She feels deafened, waiting for his words she wishes to hear.
But he long lost his voice to this stranglehold called love.’

He started eating his dinner, while I kept looking at him. Who said love is easy? Love isn’t a feeling… it’s a decision. Feelings come and go, but the decision to stand steadfast, to weather the storms that only love can throw at you; is eternal. My examination has just started… and I don’t know whether I would pass or fail. And the best thing… there’s no syllabus too.

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Oct 24, 2017
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Amazing
by: Your Name: Ritu

It's so beautifully written.. the story is just killing and it seems like a real life.. it's a complete set of movie but just written. .. I'm just so proud of you that you are a such a stunnee writer that I don't think so that anyone can compete you or can able to stop you . .. you are and will be a stubborn angry but a complete STUNNER.. I forget everything when I read your story.. it's hard to believe that you are reading it as it seems more like a set of movie clips I go through when I read your heart .. im not writing this because I'm your family, I'm writing it because you deserve every single word I'm writing for Your writing.

Oct 24, 2017
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Awesome
by: Preety Chawla

Absolutely beautiful story... Beautiful illustration of emotions in a picturesque manner. U r a powerful writer and bring the picture in front of eyes... Can feel everything happening in front of me and the dwindle in emotions. Awesome work girl. Keep it up

Oct 24, 2017
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Great job.
by: Prateek

Nice sorty. Great job.

Oct 24, 2017
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Narration at its best
by: Anurag

The narration was damn powerful. Whole story unfolded in front of the eyes. Quotes and story- nice thought process.

Oct 24, 2017
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Felt like a movie
by: ANKUSH

It felt like I was watching a movie... scenes were explained in detail. Liked it thoroughly 👍👍

Oct 24, 2017
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Nice
by: Sachin sagar

Nice

Oct 24, 2017
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Intriguing and Exciting
by: Your Name: Shalini

The story was intriguing and exciting at the same time. The dilemma of Sanaya was shown beautifully. Loved every word. For the first time saw story blended with quotes. Beautiful it was.

Oct 24, 2017
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Beautiful
by: Deepti

very nicely portrayed.every scene was described with amazing words.the quotes complimented the story

Oct 24, 2017
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Congratulations nice 👍
by: Pardeep

Nice story congratulations dear really it v nice 👍 good job great writer I like you story gives five star

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