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The Sharp Hones of Dilemma - contd

by Poonam Saha
(Jamalpur, Bihar, India)

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As I gained stability, I noticed a year old boy on her back. Undoubtedly, he was her child and she was married. But the sober yellow sari in which she was dressed was not revealing its sign. Her face was beaming with the usual confidence but there was an unusual maturity. It was indicating something ominous to me and I was getting curious. My head was spinning. I couldn’t forgive myself for even allowing those terrible thoughts to happen. I wanted to sit beside her in the flight and ask her everything but I couldn’t. I had to wait till I reached Bengaluru. And to my shock, I found that my apprehension was correct. She had lost her husband in an accident last year leaving behind him a child of just two months in her lap.

It was terrible. Not only me but God had also been very harsh on her. A cheerful life was left alone to face the deadly world and its daunting challenges.

She showed no signs of complaint from her life and mingled with friends in the function with the same old energy. But the world inside me was in sharp contrast with that of outside. Deep inside, I was feeling myself responsible for her fate. If I had shown little courage in the past, our life would have been something different that day.

To look at something different as though we had never
seen it before requires great courage. And I had that courage that day; I was then a different man; I was an IAS officer; I was independent; I no longer feared unjust societal pressure; I didn't care about convincing my mother. I wanted to rectify the mistake which I had committed long back in the past; I wanted to revive my feelings for her; I wanted to marry her and adopt her child as well. But the only hurdle that I needed to cross was to face her.

The ceremony ended in the morning and we had a whole day left before we leave the place. I gathered inner strength and initiated talk with her. Starting from how my professional life was, I tried to move on to topics pertaining to her life. But she was only listening. Still I kept hopes and continued the conversation. After some half an hour, she broke down and slightly pushed me back. And she herself sat down on a chair with her teary drops rolling down her cheeks. Silence prevailed in the atmosphere. She kept looking at me for several minutes as if she was trying to read my mind. And when she spoke, I was awestruck. She asked, “When are you coming to take me home?”

Wow, what a feeling it was! This time, there was no confusion in my mind. I hugged her tightly and whispered into her ears the three golden words: I love you.

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Apr 11, 2016
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Simple yet beautiful
by: Rakshita

Beautifully written..
My 5 stars for a novice as you are ,for this enjoyable writing of popular fiction.I am eagerly expecting more from you, not only the soft nuances of romance but also the different genres of juicy stories, mystery ,thriller, non fiction as well..Keep writing and surprising us each and every time.

Apr 08, 2016
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Nicely written
by: Tushar

A beautiful depiction of feelings. Could have been a little longer. Keep up the good work, Poonam!!!

Apr 05, 2016
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Brilliant piece!
by: Priyamvada

Very lucid, you have a knack for story telling.Keep writing poonam!

Apr 03, 2016
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Impressed by the originality of the story
by: Prachi Priya

I am glad the perfect girl of this story has the same name as of me. The story starts with any other love story we come across in our life. But the way story took turns kept it interesting. The climax was very unexpected. Very well presented, very smooth flow of story. Good work !!!!

Apr 02, 2016
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Was never interested in love stories but this one really moved me.
by: Saurabh mishra

Very well presented, your writing is very lucid and eloquent.

Apr 02, 2016
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Fantabulously fantastic :p
by: Abhinav

Perhaps it is good to have a beautiful mind, but an even greater gift is to discover a beautiful heart.

Mar 31, 2016
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Amazingly put!
by: Anjana Mishar

Its an amazing article and reflects on how we in India by procrastinating to fight the stereotypes are affecting our own and others' life and how this has led to a lot of indispensable damage control in our country, but what we need is uprooting the root cause. I have fought these many ills in my family and I think I see a change after years, whenever my family would ask me to shut up, I would say, I won't shut up coz Dr. Kalam, "said change begins at home", and If you don't abide by it, you are drawing my country back and your years of making people shut up has went successful but look what happened , we are a third world and a rape capital, so I am sorry that is not gonna happen anymore no matter how much that pisses you off. People like us may be a BIGMOUTH in the society but I would gladly that that, if that is what is needed. Keep writing and inspiring other to do so, we need more such people for a better India! :)

Mar 31, 2016
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Very nice
by: Prerana

It was really interesting!

Mar 31, 2016
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Nice and sweet
by: Silabhadra Daa

I must admit this was splendid.I wish the story could have continued further.

Mar 31, 2016
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Wonderful
by: Alok kumar maurya

Very nicely written. Bahut ache. You could have elaborated feelings. Ending was little sudden. Overall fabulous.

Mar 31, 2016
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Enchanted..
by: Pooja

Beautiful work,specially the confession part. Nicely done.

Mar 31, 2016
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Inexplicably beautiful!!
by: Shivangi

Caters to the emotional side of love while simultaneously covering the underlying practical aspects as well.Very beautifully written with vivid descriptions of the characters.....beautiful!!

Mar 30, 2016
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Awesome story!
by: Isha Singhal

Very well written story, emotions are very well expressed and most importantly it holds you till the end. Great Job!

Mar 30, 2016
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Well knit
by: Monali

The story holds you till the end, though the end is little bit hurrying. This means we wanted to read more. The characters framed don't appear fictious, rather real . Well written.

Mar 30, 2016
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Great Display of Emotions!
by: Mishal

I would say it's beautifully written. You never know when you get attached to the emotions of the characters in the story. You can literally feel the same way guided by excellent portrayal of emotions in the text. Excellent work. Keep it up!!! And the story does have a happy rnding 🙂 👍

Mar 30, 2016
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Emotional love story!!!
by: Sunil Rana

I really loved it and expecting more in future....

Mar 30, 2016
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Mesmerising
by: Prithiwish

Immense beauty in the work of fiction...a tale of love precise to its core..fantastic job our next Ed SAM

Mar 30, 2016
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emotion all the way
by: ankesh saha

Each and every word compel me to be in that situation.while reading ...i was living that life...at the end of your story it force us to ask question to myself ... What you would done at those situation? Most important part of the story is that every line create eagerness to know what will be next? A good piece of imaginations...keep it up

Mar 30, 2016
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Smoothly presented and emotionally appealing
by: Rajat Kumar

Great piece of writing.worth manuscripted and kept in archives.has a fabric that binds the reader, even when one is having acute shortage of patience and time

Mar 30, 2016
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Nice story
by: Sakshi Khandelwal

Very well written!
Was not in a mood to read so many lines but couldn't stop in the middle.

Mar 30, 2016
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AMAAAZING..
by: Shilpa

Your idea of picking up this concept was very innovative. The story touches a deep human side. Hoping to read some more stories from the budding writer. :-)

Mar 30, 2016
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VERY NICE!
by: Jyoti

Very beautifully expressed..the story keeps the reader bound to it. keep it up :-)

Mar 30, 2016
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Dilemma
by: Faizan Ahmad

Bohot sahi likha hai.
Btw concept was excellent.
The dilemma between the feelings and choices of life is beautifully expressed..

Mar 30, 2016
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This is what we call perfection!
by: Krishna

Once I started reading the story it required no effort from the reader side, everything was just going along. And it was not just texts written, emotions were encrypted in them. Bravo!! keep it up.

Mar 30, 2016
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Very nycly written
by: Akanksha Priya

I could really visualise every moment presented here. This short story perfectly captures a long duration completely resembles a real lyf story. Vry well written.

Mar 30, 2016
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a love story
by: Name

Beautiful story...in fact a sweet love story...thoroughly enjoyed and loved it

Mar 30, 2016
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Very well presented !!!
by: Arpita Prakash

Though the story is short it actually covered a huge span of life...and didn't seem to b a fiction to me...it could easily be related to a real life incidence where the dilemmas either let u be with everything u have wanted or leave u with nothing that u have ever wished for.
It was touching indeed :)

Mar 30, 2016
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Fabalous!!!!!1
by: Rohan

I really loved the small story. Still I find End could have been more depth.. i found the end was in too much of hurry to wrap it up. Loved it :)

Mar 30, 2016
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Amazing piece
by: Sagar Kumar

Wow!Read such a brilliant stuff after a long long time. Kept me engrossed till the end. Some of the best lines are, "But what I didn’t know was that the reunion would begin much ahead of time", "But the only hurdle that I needed to cross was to face her".
The story is a nice blend of love, thrill and raises important questions on our social attitudes and hypocrisy surrounding religious identity.

Mar 30, 2016
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emotional
by: amit saha

It was amazing. Full of feeling .It was totally emotional . I really appreciate it.

Mar 30, 2016
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Amazingly written
by: Krishna saini

the story is written amazingly with no brokage of flow in between. I couldn't resist to complete it in one go. many scenarios are well connected to Indian youths. I cut down one star as sudden end of the story was not expected. Overall your first story is fantastic. Waiting for more.

Mar 30, 2016
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Very Well Written !!
by: Gaurish Gangwar

Once you start reading it, you jUST can not stop in middle. This story binds you till the end.

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