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The Unspoken Love story... contd

by Anjali Punia
(Bahadurgar, India)

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An old lady came and stood nearby me, and I gave my seat to her. Because of the crowd, I was forced to stand next to him. The train was full. And I was pushed inside a little in the other compartment of because of sudden break. I stood there as there was no way out. The compartment was packed. Suddenly the guy standing at back of me started falling on me. I moved a little in front and same thing happened again. I was frustrated, but in the crowd I felt helpless. Suddenly I felt a hand wrapping over my shoulder and the guy who was getting on my nerves for sometime stepped back. I looked around to find him (my savior Raghav) looking at me assuring that he is there. I simply nodded my head in response to tell him that I knew he was there. No, I didn’t speak a word being the adamant girl, but words are rarely needed to convey my feelings.

Today, even after one year, both of us board the same metro in the morning. We sit or stand just next to each other, but none of us has ever spoken a word. Only our eyes and hearts do the talking. It is our unspoken love story.


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Sep 03, 2015
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Unspoken appreciation
by: Name

Loved ur story as they say silence is golden real love can be expressed through face which is index of mind.Eyes speak a lot more than words.These silent love story touched my heart Anjali.
THANK U SWEETIE FOR MAKING ME HAPPY

Aug 18, 2015
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Good job 😊😊
by: Akash

It was nice

Sep 19, 2014
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Awesome
by: Mahi

Loved it Anjali.

What drew me was that, the feelings remained "unspoken". It left us with so many possibilities. Though we all wish it would become "spoken" someday, life can throw in nasty surprises. What if she finds him with a girlfriend someday? This is a relation that comes with no words and bondage thereby. What will be the fate of such a story? Will the feelings ever get words?

This story would be haunting for sure.

Sep 19, 2014
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story
by: vimala

A well narrated story with an open end. I liked it

Sep 16, 2014
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Good job anjali
by: punya

I felt like a 12 year old just waiting to fall in love:p

Sep 06, 2014
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good one
by: aditi

Ohh god I was really lost in the story....it is jst amazing....keep it up...waiting for ur nxt story ♥

Sep 05, 2014
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just plain BEAUTIFUL!!
by: Name

OMG THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOOOO ROMANTIC Angali!!!!! Haiiiiiiiiii it makes me wish as if I too had such a story...ufff.... what makes it so beautiful is that it's "OUR unspoken love story"... BOTH love each other silently yet sooo beautifully!!!
p.s. thanks for the PM!!
-yellowpurse/vishwa :)

Sep 04, 2014
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feels gr8
by: Harshita Narang

Superb story.....loved it a lot.....really amazing

Sep 03, 2014
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amazing
by: tina

anju u r brilliant writer,yaar tumhe writing as a profession choose karna chahiye:)

Sep 03, 2014
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the unspoken love story
by: Gewels

loved, loved, loved it! bittersweet though because she thinks he'll always b there. of course he won't. life throws such fleeting chances of real happiness @ us- she should say smtg 2 him....... beautifully written Anjali, i'm so happy 4 u

Sep 03, 2014
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Great
by: Smriti

Its great n touching..... N dere r so many stories where v just don't speak up bcz of the expectations frm us of being an 'obedient' child!!!!

Sep 03, 2014
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(y)
by: Anushka Jaiswal

Really good :) keep up the good work :)

Sep 03, 2014
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Beautiful...
by: Pari

This story is beautifully written!!!! loved it to core... Hats off to the writer :)

Sep 02, 2014
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Nice
by: L

Nice, different touch and ending, though it's really not an ending to *their* story. Maybe it is, maybe not. And it's true to many.


Sep 02, 2014
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fabulous work
by: trisha

its just awesome. loved the writing style
beautiful :-)

Sep 01, 2014
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Well Done!
by: Name

Its clear you enjoy writing!Keep at it!

Sep 01, 2014
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Wow!!
by: Jahhnavi

I LOVED it!! It's awesome.. You maintained the suspense till the very end on whether or not the girl followed her heart. I wished she would finally admit she likes him too. Society, parents, studies- yeah they do play a HUGE role in our lives. And I can totally relate to why someone like her would hold back her emotions. Kudos to you for selecting this theme & writing on it as mostly we see and read about a boy & girl meeting, falling in love & happy ending. You didn't rush it. This may take years or decades to make a love story but it's still a marvelous piece. Thank you for sharing it, siren. Good job! ;)
Lots of Love & Best Wishes,
Jahhnavi :P

Sep 01, 2014
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Nice work!
by: Aashna

Very well written. Something different! Keep writing and sharing :)

Sep 01, 2014
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fantabulous
by: shilpa garg

Filled with awesomeness. ..loved it to the core...such realistic fiction.. amazing work darling...long way to go...all the very best...keep writing such amazing stories amd keep growing :)

Sep 01, 2014
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A real story
by: Saranya

The story was very lovely n so realistic that anybody could relate their life with it.You truly a brilliant writer

Sep 01, 2014
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:)
by: Ruda

Congo Anjee
You've got skills.;)

Sep 01, 2014
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awesome story
by: oishi

mind blowing story

really unique and really awesome story
loved it...

hats off to the writer

Sep 01, 2014
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Ossum
by: Dev

Really Ossum yrr... :) Feels lyk it's happening in front of me, each scene :))

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